missed added age

[machinery]

i missed your added age
pink cheeks and camera flashes

cheesy smalltown walls
sibling high school snaps
down the hall,

your family with failing citcom smiles
surrounding you with chocolate cake
and my you've grown's

hair up in a summer's tail
you're fleeting oceans looking around the room,
your tide is out.

myself, whom you haven't seen awhile
won't surround what's at stake
you're your own.

[Hannibal]

hair up in a summer's tail
you're fleeting oceans looking around the room,
your tide is out.

<font size="2" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">Great lines there man!
fleeting oceans.. man.. that is the most awesome way to describe eyes *if that is what you were describing*...
I just love it!
but as far as the "tide is out" line.. i dunno about it. I mean, i get it with the ocean referance, but.. if you are referring to someone's eyes... i dunno how they can be "out" or what not...
But man..
I gotta say, this peice is really - you.
It's got the subject matter of your early works *from way back* yet the adherence to detail and craftmanship that only experiance can wield to you.
Nice job man... thorughly impressed by this one.

[Sam Gowland]

Eyes are supposed to be the mirror to your soul so I guess if someone can be said to have 'soul less*' eyes they can have eyes that the tides gone out from too.

*soul less eyes - in the sense they're defeated, they don't sparkle with life/vigour any more. At some point life has taken all the enjoyment and what's left is just the empty shell of a person -they're soul less, hence 'soul less' eyes for the 'soul' can no longer be 'mirrored' there if no 'soul' exists. I guess the same can be implied if the tide is out from the eyes then life too is out - an empty shell of the former person.

[Hannibal]

ooooohhhhh good point, never really looked at it like that.. *thumbs up* all is well! [img]smile.gif[/img]

[Sam Gowland]

I was just thinking that maybes the 'tide is out' is something as simple as there are no tears in sight. when the tide(sea/water -obviously)goes out you are left with only sand(dry). Maybes it's the complete opposite to what I said before and this person is 'happy' !!!!


lol I think I think too much.....

[Hannibal]

Is that possible? to think too much? hahaha
I wonder what it's like to not think at all..
maybe machinery could tell us [img]wink.gif[/img] haha